#1
I recorded this a few weeks ago, just put it up.

It's just a rough (It was the first take I did lol) recording, so the playing isn't the best it could be.

"Forsaken Dreams In Her Hair" at www.myspace.com/TheCelestialFear

Or, same title on my UG profile.

Let me know what you think. =)
#2
it kinda changes keys a lot, and its only two chords. make it a little more.... jazzy? that is what your going for. and add a bassline, even if you have to play it on guitar
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#3
Quote by rage6945
it kinda changes keys a lot, and its only two chords. make it a little more.... jazzy? that is what your going for. and add a bassline, even if you have to play it on guitar

Changing keys is part of music...
And there are seven chords, not two.

What type of bass line would you suggest?
#5
Imma be bluntly honest.

I love mellow/jazzy stuff. This was not mellow/jazzy stuff. I just kept waiting for something to happen. For some sort of jive to build up. For something I could feel, and I never got it. It started to pick up in the middle... but its just lacking, a lot. It took so long to build up, that I pretty much lost interest. You need to add more. I understand that silence can be used as a great tool, but here, there was more silence than non-silence. This gave me an overwhelming sense I was listening to a controlled version of someone just picking around on a guitar at random intervals. I mean, you used the same chords which shows you meant to do it this way... it just feels hollow. Great structure, but it needs something more.

c4c? http://ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=897299
#6
Yeah this was really mellow but there wasn't that much jazz in it , sounded more like earlier pink floyd to me tbh. There was a Frank Sinatra vibe in it at times.
But hey who am I to say what's jazz and what's not.

I'd be glad if you checked out my little attempt att jazz/blues fusion
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Ffp1olumGcM