#1
I know i dont rate anyone elses really but thats cause i go on the pit more than i go here but can you please help me. I need some advice to help improve. If you want ill critic yours but lemme know wat you think.
Poison

Verse 1:
Fallen to my knees
Trying to find this air you breathe
Feelings are hidden deep inside
Feelings ill keep until I die

Your poison lips
I want it all
Just one more kiss
Before I fall
Your beautiful smile
So hard to resist
I cant find
A way to get over this

Chorus:
Ive fallen to deep
Im in love with you
Your voice is the one thing I still need
Theres no happy end, Im better for dead
I cant seem to get through this one

Verse 2:
I cant keep on hiding
Theres no places left
It all has been tanted
With your sweet scent

I wanted to give you
To give you this all
As long as your happy
Ill take the hit for you

Chorus:
Ive fallen to deep
Im in love with you
Your voice is the one thing I still need
Theres no happy end, Im better for dead
I cant seem to get through this one

Bridge:
Finding it out
Your shuting me out
Nothing that I can do could fix this
Breaking me down
You just love the sound
Of my life crashing to pieces

Chorus:
Ive fallen to deep
Im in love with you
Your voice is the one thing I still need
Theres no happy end, Im better for dead
I cant seem to get through this one

Ive fallen to deep
Im in love with you
Your voice is the one thing I still need
Theres no happy end, Im better for dead
I cant seem to get through this one
I know that I cant make it through
I cant seem to make it through this
#2
spelling isn't the greatest but I like it, it seems genuine enough and it's what we all have felt at least once, I dig...
#3
I forgot to put this on the other one sorry but I like the line:

"Breaking me down
You just love the sound
Of my life crashing to pieces"