#1
Hi, after a long time, I finally got this song done. Im still not completely happy with the time changes, so let know what you think. all kinds of crits are welcomed.
Thanks.

I'll do crit4crit too
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fallen.zip
#2
You really need to get this in GP. Since for some reason when I import it in it's not getting the time changes correctly. I ended up importing the midi to GP, so I'm not entirely certain it's sounding like it should.

Anyway, I love the intro part, it's a great build into the song.

The bass definitely needs some filling out through the entire song. It's just not present enough, and when it is there it's not really that interesting.

The first melody is great, really catchy and memorable, but it would benefit having some kind of rhythm part behind it. A clean guitar, or an acoustic or something.

The transition into the next part of the song starts off really well, I love the way you're building up the chords into the next section. Then, the time speeds up and the next riff starts. It's just awkward.

But the next riff is also very cool. The only thing I don't like is that brief break when it slows down. The actual part you've got is cool, but again the transition sounds awkward.

I like all the solos as well, they weren't brilliant, but they fit the song really nicely.

I really liked all the parts of the song. Every idea is a good idea, every melody is a memorable one. It's really the time changes that are hurting the song though. Finding a better way to transition into them would turn a decent song with a lot of great ideas, into a great song.
#3
Not really my style, but I like it. It's catchy and uplifting, but now it just needs some drums.
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#4
I thought you were being sarcastic when you said happy. :P. It was great though. Really woke me up and got me out of a tired and boring moment. It kind of made me want to break out into song and dance with the cast of high school musical. All the harmonies were well choreographed and used properly (thank god). The melody in the middle was really good. The part after that, though, I can only describe it as typical and kind of disney, no offense. Unless that was your planned direction.

All in all, as a piece of music, not being in my style, 9.5/10

C4C? It's in my sig.
#5
had to listen to the midi since I only have guitar pro.

I like the lead guitar lines you wrote
I liked the start especially.

The part where the tempo increases (or the song seems to get faster) threw me off a bit,
other than that it was good
#6
Over all I really enjoyed it, but like you said the changes could use some fixing.
#7
Quote by dervishguitar
I thought you were being sarcastic when you said happy. :P. It was great though. Really woke me up and got me out of a tired and boring moment. It kind of made me want to break out into song and dance with the cast of high school musical. All the harmonies were well choreographed and used properly (thank god). The melody in the middle was really good. The part after that, though, I can only describe it as typical and kind of disney, no offense. Unless that was your planned direction.

All in all, as a piece of music, not being in my style, 9.5/10

C4C? It's in my sig.


lol.

Thanks for all your crits, I'll se what can be done to fix the tempo changes.
#8
I really liked this. I won't really go into detail since most things have already been said, but it's really a fun song to listen to. chorus is awesome. prechorus is also awesome. I like the solo. outro solo was even better. fadeout was nicely done.

good job.
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#9
Great Song. I really enjoyed it, especially the solos. My one and only problem are the tempo changes. I think that could be easily fixed tho. Overall, great rock song. 9/10
#10
Overall I really liked it, only 2 minor complaints. First, I didn't like the transition between the break and the chorus, I feel like adding the prechorus inbetween them would work better. Second, I just have never liked songs that fade out. But other than that, its a great song.
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#11
Hey, thanks for the crit

I absolutely LOVE this song. It is precisely the sort of music I enjoy. I agree that you need to get it in Gpro, 'cos I'd actually like to learn it. The Bass is innovative, not just "ggggggggdddddddcccc" like I usually resort to, the rhythm is fresh, and the lead is just great!
The whole end solo is my favourite part overall, how the song has been getting gradually faster and faster, culminating in a really cool solo.
This is by and away my favourite song I've ever encountered on these forums
Awesome job, definitely 10/10 from me
#12
I just randomly stumbled upon this and was like what the heck ill give it a listen and I LOVED it. Its one of those times when you wish you wrote that song I really don't even have any crit for it just wanted to let ya know I found it really enjoyable