#1
Sinners scream through shattered jaws
As the sun glows dark!
Fallen hands aid the promiscuous God
The beast makes his mark!
Demons crave with outstreched claws
The city is theirs!
The leaders of men take to no heed to the calls
The rapture set in!

This is the fate that has been given to me
Do I choose faith or eternal suffering
A world soon destroyed by an omniscent force
Millions will die, no time for remorse


Rapture!
The end begins!
Rapture!
Pray for the souls condemed!

Angels sing their anicent songs
As the saints return!
Non-believers still trapped on Earth
In their cities they'll burn!
A prophecy fortold ago so long
Now they believe!
Seven years of hell before its all
Its all over now!

This is the fate that has been thrust upon me
Do I trade faith for eternal amnesty?
Martyred for the God in which we believe
But in time we will all be set free!



Its got a lot more instrumental parts to it, but this is what I've got for it so far. Its very unorthodox and not the best, but it definitly fits the song pattern.

C4C?

EDIT: The bold lines are screamed
#2
Sinners scream through shattered jaws
As the sun glows dark!
Fallen hands aid the promiscuous God
The beast makes his mark!
Demons crave with outstreched claws
The city is theirs!
The leaders of men take to no heed to the calls
This line was a HUGE stumbling block. Definitely make it "The leaders of men take no heed. . ." Sounds so much better.
The rapture set in!

This is the fate that has been given to me
Do I choose faith or eternal suffering
A world soon destroyed by an omniscent force *omniscient
Also, is omniscient the word you want there? The imagery got a little messed up.. "an all-knowing force"? Maybe you meant omnipotent.
Millions will die, no time for remorse

Rapture!
The end begins!
Rapture!
Pray for the souls condemed!

Angels sing their anicent songs *ancient
As the saints return!
Non-believers still trapped on Earth
In their cities they'll burn!
A prophecy fortold ago so long
Once again, a stumbling line. "A prophecy foretold so long ago" sounds better and flows a million times easier.
Now they believe!
Seven years of hell before its all
Not that it's really important.. But I'd just like to point out that the tribulation is split in half. 3.5 years will be peaceful, then the last 3.5 are the "Hell on earth" thing everyone thinks of.
Its all over now!

This is the fate that has been thrust upon me
Do I trade faith for eternal amnesty?
Martyred for the God in which we believe
But in time we will all be set free!


I really liked your "images" in this. It's good writing except for a few spots.

Good job.
Care to check mine out? http://ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=897060 =)