#1
this is my favorite piece of mine, willing to crit4crit :-)

Burning by me with a silent grace
I let slip through my fingertips
across a clear and open space
that shines me like, the ciggarete
Still Burning
through the holes that I could never abandon
and when the time came to dig myself in deeper
I tunneled it off and threw it all away
now I can barely smile
I'm written in

When this winding road gives way
to a less traveled broken thought
and couldn't keep
a million pieces in their
shattered changing places
well I've dremt it all before
half as much was gone was taken to
the unrelenting shadow of
and unrelenting doubt

Forign water rock a weathered ship
that's sailing through my open mouth
gone chasing after breezes that were
never really there
and that sea drifts through my veins
and tares me casually with casuallties
I swear I saw it coming but
the tides just sucked me out
just sucked me out

-cheers!
#2
please read the rules in the announcement at the top of this forum
particularly the section on titles.
*reported*
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#3
WHoAaa, and just who are you out to impress??? uh-oh he put his band name in the title!!! MODSSSSS!!!!! grow up half the titles in this forum don't follow the rules.
#4
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WHoAaa, and just who are you out to impress??? uh-oh he put his band name in the title!!! MODSSSSS!!!!! grow up half the titles in this forum don't follow the rules.



Fuck you, is the point he was trying to make.




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#5
Quote by OnFyre1211
WHoAaa, and just who are you out to impress??? uh-oh he put his band name in the title!!! MODSSSSS!!!!! grow up half the titles in this forum don't follow the rules.


Actually, the S&L forum is pretty strict on titles...

Oh, whilst I'm here, I'd like to mention that you're a dick.
I play by my own rules. And I have one rule; There are no rules... but if there are, they're there to be broken. Even this one.


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