#1
Becoming thy bəhēmāh

Shadow ov spiritual terror
Caged in ancient secrets
Thy demonstration ov thy goddess’s wrath
I take you into a world with many condemned paths!
My limbs are as strong as copper
Bones as a load of iron

Behind thy Jewish tellings
Inside thy hell-mouth of Christ
Thy dissection of the Hebrew sheep

Becoming the bəhēmāh
My Hebrew blacken divinity

God is only as strong as his followers
And every minute he is becoming weaker
The world is so blind to thy other side
Inside ov thy Behemoth’s tide

Crushing ov the Book of Job
I rise from Remains of structured beauty
Do I lay under the shadows, in thy covert ov the reeds and thy swamp?


Thy image ov God's ways!
My Maker draws his sword!
#2
Quote by herman ri2
Becoming thy bəhēmāh

Shadow ov spiritual terror
Caged in ancient secrets
Thy demonstration ov thy goddess’s wrath
I take you into a world with many condemned paths!
My limbs are as strong as copper
Bones as a load of iron

Behind thy Jewish tellings
Inside thy hell-mouth of Christ
Thy dissection of the Hebrew sheep

Becoming the bəhēmāh
My Hebrew blacken divinity

God is only as strong as his followers
And every minute he is becoming weaker
The world is so blind to thy other side
Inside ov thy Behemoth’s tide

Crushing ov the Book of Job
I rise from Remains of structured beauty
Do I lay under the shadows, in thy covert ov the reeds and thy swamp?


Thy image ov God's ways!
My Maker draws his sword!


The language here is really good. You use the "ovs" really well, demonstrating that this is based on real knowledge of another language. Swedish? I really like the line "the world is so blind to thy other side, inside ov thy Behemoth's tide", but the whole stanza seems too long tbh. Cutting "so" out of the third line and cutting a syllable each out of the first two would do it a lot of good. The last line is perfect, as is the rest of the piece.
"To be matter-of-fact about the world is to blunder into fantasy - and dull fantasy at that, as the real world is strange and wonderful." - Robert A. Heinlein