#1
Well, the title says it all. A short and simple song, with a short and simple solo (solos are my weakness). Its not aiming for greatness, but I am kinda proud of this song. I may be playing it with my band someday.

C4C.

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#2
I like the riffs in it, its well put together, the only thing I dont like its the intro, which seems a bit repetitive and boring, even before the singing, and I kind of skipped that bit the first time(listenedd to it all the second time through though), but then the chorus and stuff came on and surprised me by how good they were compared to the intro, sounds really professional and everything. The solo is ok but fells like youve stopped in the middle of it.
#3
Thank you for your reply

I'm not sure what to do with the clean parts, you are right that those get boring.

The solo...well, i always have a hard time comming with solos, I always try to keep it melodic, without any shredding mumbo jumbo (a. can't play it b. don't like it)

Thanks again!
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Awesome post, dude.

Gear:
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My metal band, Nilfgaard
#4
Well. That was quite good. Let me say I quite liked that.

With the clean intro... I liked it. The first four bars anyway. But I think that bars 3 and 4 should only be played once and the first 2 bars should be repeated 3 times. The clean bit after that is a bit boring I'll agree. It's not really bad, just could be better. The drums are a touch odd too. I like your choice of snare for the verse, it really suits.

The pre-chorus is good, I like how you've got the clean guitar and the distorted guitar playing together. Works really well. Only thing I'd have to say there is maybe a much bigger drum fill before the chorus. By big I don't mean lots of notes, just really build it up, cause it's not quite really there, I don't think. It's hard to describe what I mean, but it needs to be big and epic and really smack you in the face and make you sit up and go "Wow I'm expecting something awesome now" and then you hit 'em with the chorus. Kinda make sense?

The chorus is quite good, I like that. Only thing I have to say there is in the second half of the riff, maybe instead of having the F Eb F power-chords, do like the first half and go F Eb Eb. Just a thought.

I like the second verse, that's a really good riff. Great job man, very enjoyable. I really love the pinch harmonic. Pinch harmonic's are just great. However for the notes leading up to the pinch harmonic, I think instead of having it as three quavers you should keep that rhythm you have in the verse and make it a semi-quaver then quaver then semi-quaver then quaver then pinch harmonic. See if you like it.

Nice fat chords after that, me likey.

Chorus, again, good. Same as what I said before.

In the bridge I think you should give the guitar with the cool line a volume boost. Apart from that, great.

The verse riff is nicely used there, well done.

Now, the guitar solo. I could pick it apart note for note. But I won't. What I will say is yes it sounds kinda unfinished, so I think you should put in some kind of down run and maybe have the last note ring out over the first bar of the chorus. Try that.

Chorus, same as what I said before.

Verse riff for the outro, nice.

I quite like the way you've changed the riff and cut off the last beat. That's really good, and it grabs your attention. However, put a damn rest in there!

Then the next bar, same thing as I said about the pinch harmonic in the verse riff, I just think the rhythm leading up to it should be different. However it's up to you.

So, all in all, a fine song my man. It was definitely a pleasure listening to that. If you ever record that properly I'll buy a copy thanks. Certainly a few little things that I would tweak if I was writing it, but it's up to you. Overall I'd say about an 8/10.

Wow, I think that's the most in-depth review of a song I've ever done!
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#5
Thats the most in-depth review I recieved

Most of the drums are just placed there to add the rythm and fit in, I'm hoping that our drummer will think something better.

Well the rythm before the pinch harmonic sounds diffrent on real guitar, its chugged in with the correct phrasing

Thanks for the long review
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Quote by sTx
Awesome post, dude.

Gear:
Epiphone Les Paul Studio Goth
Peavey Valveking 112
My metal band, Nilfgaard
#6
Haha, it's cause your song is fairly simple and riffy, like it moves from one riff to the next, so it was easy for me to review it riff by riff.

I was thinking after I listened to it, it reminds me of Three Days Grace sort of. Are they one of your influences?

Well I think you did pretty well on the drums. Here's a tip for writing drums though; whenever you've got some kind of weird rhythm with the guitars, have the kick drum playing the same rhythm. It doesn't always work, but sometimes it does and it sounds fantastic, especially for breakdowns.

I'd be interested to hear the riff played on real guitar. But did you get what I meant about the semi-quaver quaver thing?

Also, could you give my song a review? It's very sad and lonely cause no-one's reviewed it. =(
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#7
Could you give me a link? The link in your sig sends me to "The most important two things in the world" thread in the advanced forum

Actualy, I never heard about the band Three Days Grace.

I tried the diffrent riff, still not sure about it.
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Awesome post, dude.

Gear:
Epiphone Les Paul Studio Goth
Peavey Valveking 112
My metal band, Nilfgaard
#8
Oh. Oops. Mustn't have copied the link correctly after linking a friend to some technique advice. I'll go fix that now.

You've never heard of Three Days Grace? Oh well, you should check them out. I think you'd like them. Your stuff is similar to theirs, although I think yours is slightly more complex and heavier. But yeah, check them out, especially the songs Time Of Dying and Animal I Have Become.

Which different riff? Are you talking about the bit before the pinch harmonic? If you like, I can fiddle with it and put in some of my ideas then show you them and you can see if you like them.
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#9
I crited your song

Thanks for your help offer, but I think I won't be changing anything atm (maybe the solo, I should get rid of this semi-sweep stuff and put something better).

Any more opinions?
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Quote by sTx
Awesome post, dude.

Gear:
Epiphone Les Paul Studio Goth
Peavey Valveking 112
My metal band, Nilfgaard
#10
It was all a little bit unspectacular. I mean there was nothing wrong with what you wrote but a lot of it seemed a little bit generic. I definitely liked your second verse riff though. Your solo was decent, though it felt like it should have gone on for another two bars. It was fairly repetitive as well and probably could have used a few more hooks (though I guess that could come with vocal parts?). One thing you should do though is spice up the bass parts a little because they all seem a little bit boring and one good way to make what is really a sort of generic riff interesting is through a nice bassline underneath it.

Good job overall, though there's definitely some room for improvement.

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#11
Thanks for the review, i'll crit yours when I get up (sleepy)

About the bass: i'm no bass specialist, but I think that when my band gets a bassist, he will change the bass however he will like it :P
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Quote by sTx
Awesome post, dude.

Gear:
Epiphone Les Paul Studio Goth
Peavey Valveking 112
My metal band, Nilfgaard
#12
I really liked it, it was very atmospheric and it helped to build up the mood to a climax at the solo, the way songs should. The only real criticsm I can make is that the solo was quite short, and I think the song could really benefit from it being longer.

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#13
Alright, let's see.

Intro was decent, but it just kick of lacked something for it's length. It might be better if you dropped the repeats so you could get to the part where the band enters sooner. either that or maybe a harmonized guitar part or something.

The next two sections of the intro (bars 5-12 I guess) are great, I wouldn't change them, or add anything to them.

Bars 13-16 are kind of boring. a lead melody would work really nicely over top of the straight 8th note rhythm, or maybe do something interesting with the bass part.

The Chorus (18-19) is a great rhythm riff. Both catchy and memorable. You might consider having the second guitar doing something else. Something really simple like playing the backing chords to the rhythm on the higher strings and letting them ring. So you'd have your one chugging guitar on the bottom and one up top just filling it out with something subtle.

The second verse is very cool. I really like how you start off with the PM'd notes, and then follow up with the chords. That kind of thing really adds a lot of power.

The bridge is also great. Placed at a good spot in the song, and the drums and the backing guitar playing the chords maintains the momentum you've built up already.

The solo....

Is beautiful in it's simplicity. I've lost count of how many completely unmemorable Metal solos that I've heard here. But this one is memorable. It fits the music, and each idea is phrased in such a way that is easy for a person to hear, understand and remember. Of course, it's far, far too short and, there are plenty of things that would improve what's already there. Bends, a slightly altered phrasing and what not. Also since it's started relatively simple, it leaves plenty of room to really open up and bring out some massive shred at the end. I always thought it was lame when solos would burst out of the gate with some super shred. I always thought that kind of stuff was best reserved for the end to really build up a solos finish and put a bang onto it.

Anyway, I really enjoyed this one. Great job.
#14
Thanks for the reviews

The solo will be probably changed (longed) a bit, but I don't know when, solos hardly come to my head.
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Quote by sTx
Awesome post, dude.

Gear:
Epiphone Les Paul Studio Goth
Peavey Valveking 112
My metal band, Nilfgaard