#1
Three years ago
You caught my eye
You caught my eye
But that doesn’t seem so far now
And im not sure how
I but youre here now
and I don’t really care,
as long as your there

An all
those ones I’ve tried
the ones with nothing
Going on inside
have fallen fast
outta my head now
there outta my head now
But I don’t even care
Now that your there

And I don’t care when you call me
as long as you call me
I’ll stay up waiting by the phone and I
I don’t care
When you come by
as long as you come by
Even if im late for work
I don’t even care
as long as your there

And even if your unsure now
I’m hoping that with time
I can turn your mind around
and maybe things could change
for the better or for the same

And I don’t care when you call me
as long as you call me
I’ll stay up waiting by the phone and I
I don’t care
When you come by
as long as you come by
Even if im late for work
I don’t even care
as long as your there
#2
well I didn't liked the flow at the first couple of verses, but it gets better toward the end,
that song is a bit too obvious and too simple in my opinion (but hey, that's only my opinion)
though, I do think that this can make a nice, calm song with the right melody .

I'd be glad if you'll crit my song (in my sig)
thanks.
#3
Quote by Smoothrider_41
Three years ago
You caught my eye
You caught my eye
But that doesn’t seem so far now
And I'm not sure how
I but you're here now
and I don’t really care,
as long as your there

An all
those ones I’ve tried
the ones with nothing
Going on inside
have fallen fast
outta my head now
thier outta my head now
But I don’t even care
Now that your there

And I don’t care when you call me
as long as you call me
I’ll stay up waiting by the phone and I
I don’t care
When you come by
as long as you come by
Even if I'm late for work
I don’t even care
as long as your there

And even if your unsure now
I’m hoping that with time
I can turn your mind around
and maybe things could change
for the better or for the same

And I don’t care when you call me
as long as you call me
I’ll stay up waiting by the phone and I
I don’t care
When you come by
as long as you come by
Even if I'm late for work
I don’t even care
as long as your there


some grammar.


I like it overall. It's doesn't really stand out from other love songs though, you know?
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#4
Is this a love song? They aren't worth writing. Women are bitch.