#1
i'll give you a present
a secret you can keep forever
and you won't tell anyone
you'll take it to the grave and beyond
with the passing of many unspoken years
you'll whisper my secret into another boys ears
you'll take me out of the frame in your mind
place me in a box labelled 'in another life'

but now i
find myself
arguing about you
in my mind
and all the things
you left behind
remember when you would say
don't wish your life away
but now all i wish for is you, my darlin'
now all i wish for is you.

we are not the only pair
others have loved but wouldn't dare
keep the secrets that we have kept
it's far to outragous to think about
with the passing of many unspoken years
you'll whisper my secret into another boys ears
you'll take me out of the frame in your mind
place me in a box labelled 'in another life'

and i know
that you will
take my secret
to the grave
lying beside
the boy who
stole it from me.
#2
i really like it but i think you should re-order the chorus because it doesn't really follow the rhythym of the verse. other than that it's pretty good imo.
Quote by NGD1313
Well I don't know about solos but how about that Smoke on the Water riff. It's like...impossible.


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