#1
Don't you love the randomness =D
Pretty short and simple, one guitar, one bass, one drum track.
Attachments:
fo shizzle metal.zip
Gallien Krueger is awesome
Last edited by lionslicer9999 at Jul 8, 2008,
#2
It was short, repetitive and somewhat boring.
Keep working on it.
-Gear-
Mesa Triple Rectifier---Bogner/Line6 SpiderValve---Orange PPC 4x12

-Pedalboard/Rackmount-
Alesis MidiVerb4--BBE SonicMaximizer 442--Ibanez TS9
Boss DD-3--Morley Mark Tremonti Wah

-Guitars-
Ibanez ART-100
Ibanez S-470
#3
Quote by FlyingPooooo
It was short, repetitive and somewhat boring.
Keep working on it.


*works on it*
There made it longer, and gave it a breakdown, kinda.
Attachments:
fo shizzle metal.zip
Gallien Krueger is awesome
#4
I'm gonna go ahead and crit both the versions you uploaded, could help you know if your changes worked well?

Okay so... first version:

Bars 2 and 3 had me worrying a bit, but the drums that kick in, in bar 4, really make that riff. HOWEVER, personally, I'd only have played bar 4 through twice, not four times.
It's all good up to bar 9 from there.

It's good to get a new rhythm in, and bar 10 does that well.

Bars 17 - 20... I wouldn't have repeated those.

The bar 21 riff is pretty cool too, but again, I would have stuck the repeat on 23 -24.

Now that riff that kicks in, in bar 25, is actually awesome. I would've repeated that, it smacks of groove!

Digging bar 29s' riff, but it's not an outro.

And as an overall comment... I LOVE the drums, all the way through.
10/10 on the drums, room for improvement with the rest of it.
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So, onto your updated version...

Hooray bar 33! I'd glad you gave that riff some more time in the sun.

Bar 42 is a wicked fill, on all the instruments, and the breakdown it goes into is pretty cool... and now it has an ending.

Still, in my opinion a couple of the repeats don't really work too well, and the riffs are kinda samey. Without some variety to spice it up, I'd give it a 6/10.
...but this second version is a definate improvement on the first, so well done in that respect.
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