#1
Hello, I'm new and I haven't been into songwriting for a while. Just for reference I put my lyrics in the exact order and number of times I think they should be heard. These lyrics, I just came up with, sort of follow the rythem of "DOA" by the Foo Fighters. I want some criticism to know what I should be improving on, if anyone can tell me. Please don't just tell me it sucks without a good reason.

"It's Just A Nightmare"

Are you ready to hear
What I have to say?
Are you ready for the bars
To start breaking away

I've spent these moments,
Most what feel like years,
Wasting away
In your many fears.

The times I keep on
Tellin' myself.
The times I keep on
Remindin' myself.
Hear the words I keep on repeatin'
It's all just a dream,
It's all just a dream.

It's your turn now
To feel this pain
The many tourtures
You keep putting to play.
Our broken bones
Will rise once again
To take these souls
And put it all to rest.

Finally,
The chance has come.
Our moments of waiting
are almost nearly done.

The prayers I keep on
sending to you.
That you keep rejectin'
only because it's ture.

This is something I have to face.
Another monster in my face.
The words you say are staying there.
In that hole, inside of my head.

It's your turn now
To feel this pain
The many tourtures
You keep putting to play.
Our broken bones
Will rise once again
To take these souls
And put it all to rest.

How many times?
I always tried.
What do you want?
I gave you my life.

Now your asking for more,
Which I can't give.
And was the flaw,
That put you to your end.

It's your turn now
To feel this pain
The many tourtures
You keep putting to play.
Our broken bones
Will rise once again
To take these souls
And put it all to rest.

The times I keep on
Tellin' myself.
The times I keep on
Remindin' myself.
Hear the words I keep on repeatin'
It's all just a dream,
It's all just a dream.

But it seemed like a nightmare.
#2
Over all I really like it, It's pretty vague, but has a lot so you can pull a lot of different meanings.

It kinda feels like you gave up on the rhyme at the 4th paragraph.

Also the term "almost nearly" cancels it's self and is confusing. Some people will know it doesn't mean nearly and some people will think it's like a double nearly.

good job though
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