#1
Happy Birthday To You
Happy Birthday To You
Happy Birthday Dear Carmel
Happy Birthday To You
#2
woooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooow

Origionaly Posted by CTFOD
Origionaly Posted by hownowbrowncow:
Get a new bicycle
Then you can ride it with no handlebars.

No handlebars.

No handlebars...
#3
I love the use of repetition- it really emphasises the point that it is, in fact, Carmel's birthday.

I think it's a song that other people can really connect to- I know I, as an individual, can take a lot from this, and I really can feel the lyrics.

Nice work, Luke.

Hip hip, hooray.

Can I have crit for crit on my last poem?
VENUSIAN
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Patterns In The Ivy present ethnicity on an intriguing and dedicated level. ~Ambient Exotica
A mesmeric melange of yearning voice, delicate piano and carefully chosen samples. ~Lost Voices
Last edited by rabidguitarist at Jul 10, 2008,