#1
So my school is having a contest where we have to write our own songs and play them at the end of term in front of the whole school, I thought I'd let you guys see my lyrics and see what you think.
Here are some lyrics I just finished called 'Knight In Shining Armour'. I'm a bit worried about the line lengths, but apart from that, I'm pretty pleased with them. For the tune, I'm thinking of something similar to Avril Lavigne's stuff from 'The Best Damn Thing'. Any comments appreciated.

Verse One:

A teenage boy who didn’t believe he is a wizard
Owns a yew wand, a map and a special cloak
Fought the Dark Lord, can’t fight off the girls
Got a boy and girl who are his best friends

Chorus:

I want my own knight in shining armour, ooh
Even if the supply of them is very, very few
I really don’t care, I still want one, oh yeah
Did you hear me or not, I said I don’t care

Verse Two:

A Time Lord who travels time and space
In his TARDIS with a friend or two or three
Has a sonic screwdriver and has a robot dog
Fought the Daleks, Cybermen and monsters

Chorus:

I want my own knight in shining armour, ooh
Even if the supply of them is very, very few
I really don’t care, I still want one, oh yeah
Did you hear me or not, I said I don’t care

Verse Three:

Got sent to planet Earth by his mum and dad
His alter ego is a journalist wearing glasses
Can fly, see through things and run like the wind
Can’t be killed by anything but a dose of Kryptonite

Chorus:

I want my own knight in shining armour, ooh
Even if the supply of them is very, very few
I really don’t care, I still want one, oh yeah
Did you hear me or not, I said I don’t care

Verse Four:

He got told stories of talking animals as a child
Fought alongside the Kings and Queens of old
Owns a black horse and borrows a magic horn
Travelled towards the end of the world with a mouse

Chorus:

I want my own knight in shining armour, ooh
Even if the supply of them is very, very few
I really don’t care, I still want one, oh yeah
Did you hear me or not, I said I don’t care
(x2)"
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#4
It doesn't rhyme but I guess that's OK.
Still, I can't seem to get the rhythm of the lyrics. They're a little choppy in places.

The lyrics are interesting... not bad, but interesting.
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#5
Vocals will probably be done similar to Jeff Walker's style actually, I don't think the Avril Lavigne thing will be as effective.
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#6
I'm thinking of adding a bridge, possibly something abiut Lord of the Rings...what do you guys think?
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