#1
This song took a while to come up and i am reall curious to see what people think you can listen to it here on my ultimate-guitar profile or at myspace.com/hellcaster1990
#2
Good job man. I like the intro arpeggiations, i think you should play a few more repetitions of them. The chord progressions and rhythm sound good, a bit of a sad feel, Idk if thats what you were going for but it sounds good. Other than that I would just say work on the production and throw some bass/drums/vox on top of it. Maybe try using the neck pickup on your guitar if your not, because the rhythm is a bit piercing at times and it will give it a bassier tone.

Overall a very good first recording of the song, I enjoyed the listen.

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