#1
She tells me that she just wanted to be loved
But knowing she’s done with him is more than enough
I can’t believe he’d hurt this beautiful girl
So I tried to love her and put her on top of the world
Something about it made her feel uncertain
And whose to blame her after everything that has happened
Why did he have to have such a short fuse
And now she thinks loving someone comes with abuse
And there is nothing I can think of but her
And I just don’t want to remember

She’ll never know what love is
She’ll never understand the feeling
And it’s hard to look and know
The truth behind all of this
And it’s so hard to let it go
Cause she will never know
What love is

She wanted to be with every guy she could
I kept trying to tell her it won’t work out good
I wanted to be with her and nothing more
She told me I was too good for a girl like her
I still remember the look she gave me
When I told her that’s not who she wanted to be
She never listened to what I had to say
And that love was more than giving yourself away
And there is nothing I can think of but her
And I just don’t want to remember

She’ll never know what love is
She’ll never understand the feeling
And it’s hard to look and know
The truth behind all of this
And it’s so hard to let it go
Cause she will never know
What love is

A girl died at only the age of seven
And I wonder what more that her life could have been
The whole accident could have been avoided
If her dad just cared about sobriety near his kid
Her life was done before she had to worry
About anything more than her bed time story
And now that she’s gone I try not to wonder
If she’ll ever be loved by more than her mother
And I just can’t get my thoughts around this girl
And I cant believe she’s left this world

She’ll never know what love is
She’ll never understand the feeling
And it’s hard to look and know
The truth behind all of this
And it’s so hard to let it go
Cause she will never know
What love is

She’ll never know what love is
She’ll never understand the feeling
And it’s hard to look and know
The truth behind all of this
And it’s so hard to let it go
Cause she will never know
What love is
#2
Woww...

That is BEAUTIFUL!!! I could really feel the emotion behind the words. The last verse gave me chills...my sister died when she was seven back in 1986 (the result of a drunk-driving accident of which my mother was the only survivor). You have a real gift for writing. Keep up the GREAT work!!!
#3
Very good...

I can also relate to the message as I lost my brother at a young age as well...

The only part that irked me a bit was the third verse where the rhyming was a bit out.

"Seven" and "Been" are slightly off, perhaps "Heaven" or "Given" would be better alternatives?

"Avoided" and "Kid" are also off, and perhaps "like she did" or "when he did" is an alternative?

Great work though!

Regards.
#4
Quote by Born_2_Play
Woww...

That is BEAUTIFUL!!! I could really feel the emotion behind the words. The last verse gave me chills...my sister died when she was seven back in 1986 (the result of a drunk-driving accident of which my mother was the only survivor). You have a real gift for writing. Keep up the GREAT work!!!



Thanks!!
#5
I love the theme you have in this song, and you don't present it so poorly. My review might not be so helpful - I'm a poet not a song writer.

I think it would be better if you did less telling, or at least, made the telling more poetic. Make what you say not only emotional, but beautiful and significant. songs and poetry are one in the same, but a lot of people today, and a lot of today's music, forgets that music should not only tell a story but should paint a picture, and be beautiful in the word choice and metaphors. I think if you could make the language of this stronger it would mean a lot more.

Your verse "A girl died at seven..." threw me off - I didn't realize that you were speaking about the girl there, again. It was confusing.

I hope this helped. C4C? https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=906421
#6
Quote by Androgyne

Your verse "A girl died at seven..." threw me off - I didn't realize that you were speaking about the girl there, again. It was confusing.]


its three different girls, not the same one.

the first one was abused by her boyfriend, the second was a slut, and the third was just a young girl