#1
Just something I wrote in a few hours, nothing amazing, but its my first song, so id just like to know if I'm on the right track or if I'm ****.
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Metalcore Song.zip
#2
it's too steady and quite boring. seems kinda stuck in the pentatonic box and some parts aren't really musical.
#3
fair enough, though id didn't actually base it on a pentatonic, just to let you know, it was A natural minor
#4
This kind of has a thrashy feel

But, it's pretty solid, you just need to change up the part at :43.

Like add some hammer-ons, trills, pinches, etc.
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cuz ppl hate how power metal they are cuz they think its "gay" or w.e, which is immature and dirogitory
#5
so, slaytanic, just add some pinches and other fancy stuff to the chorus riff bit? what about the solo, was it all right?
#6
It was a fair bit alright, nothing "" but nothing really crap.
R.I.P. Charles Michael "Evil Chuck" Schuldiner
B. May 13 1967 - D. December 13 2001

Quote by eggsandham2
cuz ppl hate how power metal they are cuz they think its "gay" or w.e, which is immature and dirogitory
#7
yea i wasn't expecting perfection or anything but as long as people think its a solid solo im happy, since its the first i wrote
#8
I liked the solo, and the rest was alright.
and in the chorus try to add something with the rhythem guitar.. it's just kinda boring like that.
but over all it was 3.5/5
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#9
Octavarium, what would you mean by something, the same kinda thing that Slaytanic suggested?