Join date: Jul 2006
417 IQ
That is a really sweet piece man, kudos to you.
I can't think of any criticism or improvements to make, not one.
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Join date: Jul 2008
186 IQ
Oh when i start listen this, i thought like what was this guy doing..but when the song has reached to prechorus(bar 57) took my interest..But the chorus riff is still simple.. Spice it up and then it'd be super cool song..The outro is just ok!! anyway... 8/10
Lucas Townshend
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Join date: Dec 2007
122 IQ
I think the intro was lacking something and the verses were too simple,but man,what you did on the bridge and with the strings combined with the intro riff was really amazing.
The 6/8 time made the bars in the chorus a little too 'rushed',If you know what I'm trying to say,but it was nice anyway.
Nice song by the way =) 8/10
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Join date: Oct 2007
2,340 IQ
that was very nice dude. i liked it. not too much, but it didnt get boring. kept my attention. i think you should just scrap bar 129 though, so it isnt just a huge silence.

edit: i also wasnt feeling the lead in bar 112. you should change it to e 10 and b 13. it sounds better imo
Last edited by ninja.kitty at Jul 14, 2008,
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Join date: Aug 2007
210 IQ
I loved it. Honestly, the only thing I can say is that the electric piano in the prechorus doesnt need all the extra notes - just keep the melody notes for it. But even that is just nitpicking. It kind of reminds me of the song "Even Rats" by the Slip, from the first guitar hero game.
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Join date: Jun 2006
1,590 IQ
holy ****. holy ****. that was amazing. There were no flaws but what I loved most about it was the use of keys in the prechorus. I guess one improvement could be using keys throughout the entire song, but it's all just personal preference. Great song. You are excellent at writing melodies.

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