#1
If I go if I go if I go if I go
Ooh ooh ooh ooh
Uh huh uh huh uh huh.
Kick-kick-kick-kick start my hair part.
There are many ways to do-do-do-do this.
Magnum condoms.
Heart mugs.
Melt my guts.
Melt my guts.
Melt my guts.
"You remind me of fast food."
"Oh yeah?"
"Because I want to take you out."
"Oh, well aren't you the charmer!"
"Then I want to eat you in my car."

I spent 2/3rds of my life under the idea that to die is to
fuck your nausea out.
You can't melt guts that have turned into snakes.
Poor advice.
#2


That was beautiful.





......


...Nothing you've ever...
...Planned on ever turned out...
...The way you planned...


...You're still disappointing them...
#5
Unique but very much you. The repetition got a little bit tedious but when it opened up, there was a weird charm. I was left with one of those half smiles at the end and I like that.
Anatomy Anatomy
Whale Blue Review

Park that car
Drop that phone
Sleep on the floor
Dream about me
#6
I agree with jiminizzle, it is very much similar to your style, but seeing as your style is just about everything under the sun, it feels like a contradiction saying that, but anyway.
I really enjoyed this, although it takes time to get into it. The last line in particular needs deep thought to really appreciate it.
I would say the qouted section is the highlight, it brings the whole piece to a more relatable edge and then pushes you off in a very cruel way. Thats what I derived from this - anger.
Brilliant.

Digitally Clean
#8
The last line of the first part made me laugh out loud. I wasn't a huge fan of the repetition though. I guess on a scale of flaccid to raging, it gave me a chubby.
#10
Quote by #1 synth
You remind me of Sage Francis for some reason. In a good way.


What?
Agghh skeet, skeet, crit me, skeet, skeet!