I think it's a bit disjointed. The transitions aren't particularly smooth, and it doesn't really fit together, particularly near the start... The guitar work is also a bit...strange. Drums are probably the highlight, in my opinion, anyway, and I really don't think the solo does anything for the song...

I think the 4/4 and 3/4 time signatures on bars 21, 22 don't help.
I like the work at bar 27, and I think you should do some more work with that rhythmic style...

Having said that, do some more writing, you might find a style you particularly like, and again, this is just my opinion...

Dragonforce? I don't even know what that is. Isn't it that Japanese card game "Dragon Force Z"?
Only bars 2-3 really appealed me.

Can't really be bothered critting so yeah, that is my input.

Edit: Oh yeah, +1 on the transitions.

And sort of to add to what they said, I quite liked bar 21, but bar 22 killed it imo.
Last edited by Regression at Jul 15, 2008,