#1
I wonder what they do when they see her eyes are burning.

Her passion coursing
Flowing like lava's glorious crimson fury.

With the soul of a butterfly
Her shimmer speaks to me.

What once hindered, and turned me blind
Now empowers my lust for happiness.

Curious, inquisitive, words to describe the mind
But contentious, and humbled are the words that describe mine.
Marijuana is the spice of life.

I Force Choke my penis when I masturbate.

8)-~
#2
i like it. i enjoy the way it's written. I dont completely understand it, but that's me.

i really enjoy the last stanza/two lines.
#3
I like the way you describe passion a lot because that's exactlyy my idea of what passion is.
#4
Curious, inquisitive, words to describe the mind
But contentious, and humbled are the words that describe mine.

i liked that line brent , great writing
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#5
great wording and very powerful...i liked it very much...good job!
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#8
BRENT have my babies!!!!! Very nice work dude. I like the way you really zone in on the feeling expressed in this poem. Very nice choice of words!!
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#9
Awesome feeling, man. The language really colors well.
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#10
me gusta mucho hombre
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#11
Yeah, that middle part is about how love can lead you blindly, but can also strengthen you.
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#12
Very strong and emotive. Very nicely written raven
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