#1
Im sittin in this room of ´my fortunes fate
No windows no light something i've made
Im stuck in this position no one helped me out
Alone in this room - silent shout

Hello is there anybody out there
hello is there anybody who can here me


I think its winter i think its cold
my rent is not paid i think its sold
nothing is how it seems to be
im gonna die thats how the fate is to me


Hello is there anybody out there
hello is there anybody who can here me

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i'm VERY bad in writin' songs.. so i tried my best..

how is it ? can you help me with more words or give me feedback about this ?

thanks

hang loose#
#3
Mmmmm, its blah. Nothing special about it at all. Try using stronger words so that it has more power to it. Keep writing, you'll get it eventually get the hang of it.

C4C? Mines in the sig
#4
Last two lines are from comfortably numb by pink floyd.
Quote by ottoavist

i suppose there's a chance
i'm just a litte too shallow to consider
that maybe i've been a little more eager
each day to wake up and take a shower
brush my teeth and smile for the mirror