#1
Ok I wrote this song with the idea of another sort-of 2x4 by Metallica, you know, swingy but still rock. It's about people who go all the way just to prove you wrong or get you to make an ass out of yourself, and then draw back to watch the effects, pretending to be innocent. Here goes:

Can ya hear them hard-hearts,

They try to move ya,

Can ya see that evidence,

It tries to prove ya.


Takin' it too hard,
Drawin' the doom card,
Death's not your last friend,
Life, no, it's not the end.

Can't ya hear that bell-chime,

Unleashin's its toll,

Can't ya see, you're the enemy,

Man, you're on a roll


Takin' it too hard,
Drawin' the doom card,
Death your first friend,
Life, no, it's not the end.
Check out my music, if you please.
#2
Hmm, I could see this; it was very catchy, mainly because an excessive use of the word 'ya.' I guess that's not exactly a bad thing. It seemed a little country-ish with 'them hard hearts.' And the 'Death your first friend' might have also been excessive. But I could really see this as an actually song! So keep up the good work.

Below is mine, if you have the time.
https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=911488
#3
Quote by akikobleu
Hmm, I could see this; it was very catchy, mainly because an excessive use of the word 'ya.' I guess that's not exactly a bad thing. It seemed a little country-ish with 'them hard hearts.' And the 'Death your first friend' might have also been excessive. But I could really see this as an actually song! So keep up the good work.

Below is mine, if you have the time.
https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=911488



thanks dude, will do.
Check out my music, if you please.