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The story of three women goes the same way for every man.
The heartache, the mistakes, and the good old master plan.
Three women who loved you, now three women who cry.
Three freshly opened wounds that make you wanna die.

The story of a former love always ends the same.
Ends with words of regret, and some tears of shame,
but the story of three women is quite a bit different.
Because it's three times as bad, but none more innocent.

You gave them promises, and they gave you their hearts.
You took them on a hellish trip, and fed them to the sharks.
You lied when you said forever, and everytime you said yes.
You lied, and you remember everytime you broke those promises.

The story of three women is a hell'uva heartwrenching tale.
It makes you feel sorry for what they had to feel.
Three women with broken hearts and polished golden rings.
Rings that don't mean a thing, tears are all they bring.

A former love is like a scar that will never ever fade.
She lays with you in the shade, and is branded on your brain.
A promise that is broken feels like a thorn in your foot.
You can never get it out, but you wouldn't if you could.

You gave them promises, and they gave you their hearts.
You took them on a hellish trip, and fed them to the sharks.
You lied when you said forever, and everytime you said yes.
You lied, and you remember everytime you broke those promises.

And now three women sing for you and your shame.
Lalalalalalalala.
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My band and I are recording this soon for our EP. All we need now is a female vocalist for a few parts.
#2
Bloody hell are those cool lyrics ... Do you mind letting me know when you've finished the EP?
#3
Quote by Nielsyboy
Bloody hell are those cool lyrics ... Do you mind letting me know when you've finished the EP?


I'll let you know as soon as we get it done.

Thanks!
#5
i really liked it a lot. Very creative and most of it read very well. There were a few lines that were really clever and really creative

the only criticsm i can offer is that the line at the end of the first verse, "...wounds that make you wanna die" is not my favorite. Judging by the rest of the song you can come up with something better that doesn't seem as forced

also the lines "A promise that is broken feels like a thorn in your foot.
You can never get it out, but you wouldn't if you could." could use a little work. It works great except for one thing, if i had a thorn in my foot i would absolutely get it out if i could haha. I would suggest keeping everything else and just change the thorn part. Lyrically that part sounds awesome it just deosn't really make sense to me

over all it was excellent...you def got me interested in hearing it recorded.

https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=911164
-----if you get a chance