#1
This one is really theatrical and musical, so, as lyrics, I tink it's not very special. Prove I'm wrong, or destroy me ! C4C (leave link)

I won’t say that I love you,
because there are people in the audience who mustn’t know;
people in the audience who’d kill to know
that I love you.

Oh! But it’s so hard to hide and so easy to notice.
My acts are all compulsive, so I can’t decide to act or not.

And all the scenes that occur
through this piece are
tragic demonstrations of my devotion,
properly inserted in a great romance.
And no matter what scenario we’re on,
my arms will be outstretched to the sky,
revealing the emotions that are so hard to hide.

This drama must be suspenseful,
because there are people in the audience biting their nails;
people in the audience sweating for the great finale.

And oh! They try so hard to hide but it’s so easy to notice.
They think it’s too repulsive but enjoyable in its own way.

And all the scenes that occur
through this piece are
tragic demonstrations of my devotion,
properly inserted in a great romance.
And no matter what scenario we’re on,
my arms will be outstretched to the sky,
revealing the emotions that are so hard to hide.

The curtain fell down and no one made a sound.
Are they so appalled or did we suck so much?
When the curtain goes up, do we expect tomatoes
or million roses at our feet?
And it rises! But no one’s there...
What a standing ovation from useless chairs!
May I take the opportunity to shout my feelings
and invite you to a dance, while the lights are dimming?

So may the inexistent orchestra begin their performance...

(This is the part where something like a waltz begins followed by a guitar solo)

No one was there to witness
the day we carved our love in history.
It was the peak of our lives;
It was only downhill from there.
#2
It sounds very "Panic! at the Disco-ish" to me. Not my style really, but to each his own...
NICKtothecore.
#4
Quote by seventh_angel
This one is really theatrical and musical, so, as lyrics, I tink it's not very special. Prove I'm wrong, or destroy me ! C4C (leave link)

I won’t say that I love you,
because there are people in the audience who mustn’t know;
people in the audience who’d kill to know
that I love you.
As it opens in a very odd way, it purtains a certain originality to it, but also in that it concludes with its highlight. Usually the middle of the stanza is where the bulk of the beauty lies, but in this case, it is found in the last simple line. A far stretch from the theatrics you mentioned though.

Oh! But it’s so hard to hide and so easy to notice.
My acts are all compulsive, so I can’t decide to act or not.
The repetition of the word "act" is a little bit simple, not overly keen on it, although I do see its relevance.

And all the scenes that occur
through this piece are
tragic demonstrations of my devotion,
Smashin' line!
properly inserted in a great romance.
Makes it even better.
And no matter what scenario we’re on,
my arms will be outstretched to the sky,
revealing the emotions that are so hard to hide.
This is very much a theatrical section like you say.

This drama must be suspenseful,
because there are people in the audience biting their nails;
people in the audience sweating for the great finale.
Not sure I liked the term "sweating" here. It adds a new dimension of histeria and desperation, but I'm not sure thats what you want.

And oh! They try so hard to hide but it’s so easy to notice.
They think it’s too repulsive but enjoyable in its own way.
"Hard to hide" is repeated here again but doesn't feel like a hook, something the reader can grab onto. In themselves they are, but not in the context you have decided upon.

And all the scenes that occur
through this piece are
tragic demonstrations of my devotion,
properly inserted in a great romance.
And no matter what scenario we’re on,
my arms will be outstretched to the sky,
revealing the emotions that are so hard to hide.
I realise now what this piece is supposed to be viewed as and it certainly alters my opinions; for the better!

The curtain fell down and no one made a sound.
Are they so appalled or did we suck so much?
Nice touch of reality here. Its good to bring things back to earth for a little while and then send it back into space; into theatrics.
When the curtain goes up, do we expect tomatoes
Turns humorous now. I like that. It does feel very much like a play that is excellently directed, produced and written; something that makes you laugh, cry and everything else in between.
or million roses at our feet?
"Or (a) million roses ar our feet?"
And it rises! But no one’s there...
What a standing ovation from useless chairs!
May I take the opportunity to shout my feelings
and invite you to a dance, while the lights are dimming?
This is excellently displayed. If you were looking at this as the pinacle of the show, you have failed. But if you were hoping people to be shocked at this and to be placed in the shoes of the character in the story, then you have succeded with flying colors.

So may the inexistent orchestra begin their performance...

(This is the part where something like a waltz begins followed by a guitar solo)
You don't need to put this in mate, I had my own opinion on what should be here and it was very similar to what you had anyway. I think anyone would assume a scenario of a giant ball with an orchestrated waltz with that typical 3/4 timing.

No one was there to witness
the day we carved our love in history.
Wonderful.
It was the peak of our lives;
It was only downhill from there.
Truly capacious and desperate ending.


This was mightely good.

Digitally Clean
#5
It's curious because I don't even like Panic At The Disco (except "Build God, Then We'll Talk") and they were my major influence in writing this... strange thing...

The Mathes are also a banda I like a lot but they had no influence in this Skaliveson.

Thank you AngryGoldfish for that deep analysis again. Your opinion means a lot to me.