#1
This is a ska punk song I'm working on. It's a pretty happy sounding type tune despite what the lyrics may be about. I've got all the music down and I just need to finish the vocals so if any of you guys want this when it's done let me know. Crit 4 Crit

Verse:
He's been on the brink of suicide for quite awhile now
Everybody knew he wouldn't make it through
He wrote a letter to his mom and dad
To try to make them understand
But they didn't have a clue
When the window-washer fluid started to take effect
He knew it was the end but felt no regret
Desperate kid just needed a way out

Verse2:
Feelin' insecure inside? Need somebody to cut down?
To make yourself look better you grind others to the ground
You may not be the murderer or have commited the crime
But that's not the way I see it You deserve to do some time
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Last edited by Descendent-182 at Jul 17, 2008,
#3
Quote by Descendent-182
This is a ska punk song I'm working on. It's a pretty happy sounding type tune despite what the lyrics may be about. I've got all the music down and I just need to finish the vocals so if any of you guys want this when it's done let me know. Crit 4 Crit

Verse:
He's been on the brink of suicide for quite awhile now
Everybody knew he wouldn't make it through
He wrote a letter to his mom and dad
To try to make them understand
But they didn't have a clue
Classic punk stuff, but well put.
When the window-washer fluid started to take effect
He knew it was the end but felt no regret
This is getting a bit more original, still like it.
Desperate kid just needed a way out

Verse2:
Feelin' insecure inside? Need somebody to cut down?
To make yourself look better you grind others to the ground
Not feeling this quite as much. don't really like questions in songs, but it was a bit weak anyways.
You may not be the murderer or have commited the crime
But that's not the way I see it You deserve to do some time
I do like this part quite a bit.



Overall, I enjoyed this. Hope my crit helped. I would really like to see you go somewhere with this. Chorus, third verse, maybe a bridge. Let me know if you record it sometime. If you could, Crit one of mine in the sig. Preferrably the newest one. Thanks a lot man.