I can hardly hear the vocals...but what I can hear of it, it sounds great.

I like how at the beginning it slowly gets a little faster.....and then later through, it gets loud and rough a bit... I just flows nicley... And I've always been a fan of slow/ quiet whispers...

I truely want YOUR crit for this song: its somewhat of the same style. 8/10

It's OK, but it doesn't seem to go anywhere.

There aren't any dynamics in the vocals, so it makes it less interesting to hear, especially as there isn't much else to focus on. Maybe do a loud vocal section over the picking bit towards the end, and really sing your guts out. That way you have the inwardly quiet emotive vocals and some impassioned vocals, as well.

That is my main criticism of this song.

Care to listen to mine?