Not as bad as I thought, intro is far too long without any melodic stuff over top. Your voice is quite weak, work on that. It's also mixed way too far back. It could sound like an average live desk mix if fixed that. Guitar sound is pretty average for what sounds to me like a DI. Use a mic, also whatever panning tricks you used on the bvs kinda sucked, just keep them in one place. Gat solo a bit av too. I think your biggest problem is that you're being too much of a guitarist. Very rarely is guitar the most important element of a musical piece, once you grasp this then you will move on.
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its good
i love petty
your voice is kinda similar to his
dunno if its natural but it sound cool
only suggestion
work out the chords before you record
so it really sounds solid
some of the transitions wernt smooth