#1
Each To A Grain

Build me a home here, built it out of sand.
Keep it out of contact, away from modern man.
Now, each to a grain, there's plenty more to do.
The beginning of my kingdom, a life brand new.

Oh, but the things that trouble us
Oh, how it rains from time to time.
How I look up now and then,
Stitch up teary skies.


Now this structure, takes on different shape.
Pushed and pulled, pushed and pulled,
pushed and pulled by rain
Now, each to a grain, there's plenty more to do
The re-birth of my kingdom, a life re-newed

Oh, but the things that trouble us
Oh, how it rains from time to time.
How I look up now and then,
Stitch up teary skies.
#4
Quote by Polak
Each To A Grain

Build me a home here, built it out of sand.
Keep it out of contact, away from modern man.
Now, each to a grain, there's plenty more to do.
The beginning of my kingdom, a life brand new.

(I'm really liking the rhymes here)

Oh, but the things that trouble us
Oh, how it rains from time to time.
How I look up now and then,
Stitch up teary skies.
(The last line in this stanza is pretty cool. I like the imagery)


Now this structure, takes on different shape.
Pushed and pulled, pushed and pulled,
pushed and pulled by rain
Now, each to a grain, there's plenty more to do
The re-birth of my kingdom, a life re-newed

Oh, but the things that trouble us
Oh, how it rains from time to time.
How I look up now and then,
Stitch up teary skies.


At first read, I would have thought that it was about someone who had a bad life and is starting over, but now that I see it's from an ant's perception, I have to say that this is a really good piece. Your rhymes are excellent, the imagery is amazing, and you describe an ant's life excellently. Good job.

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It all makes sense
We're capable of beauty
Through sounds that make on cringe
The dogs only hear us now