#1
i said hey whats your name
i wanna like to go where you like to stay
im sittin here for long watchin you
your fancy dress
your dainty flow


when i started to tell you this

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what do you think of this beginning ? help me.. i dunno how to proceed with this **** -.-

cheers#
#2
"when i started to tell you this
i took the time to try and consider
the actions that had led me here
my broken heart
my roaming soul"

my attempt at continuing

best advice i cud give is go wit the flow
#3
i said hey whats your name
i wanna like to go where you like to stay
im sittin here for long watchin you
your fancy dress
your dainty flow

i think i need time for this
to understand
this certain lines you're crossing
this certain lines you're crossing
this certain lines you're crossing

when i started to tell you this
i took the time to try and consider
the actions that had led me here
my broken heart
my roaming soul

i think i need time for this
to understand
this certain lines you're crossing
this certain lines you're crossing
this certain lines you're crossing


she left me when the morning came
dont beat about the bush i said
tried a new one got up - its propably too late
make me remember - **** off i dont care

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dunt know .. what you think ? im not good in this songwriting stuff.. but tell me your point of view
cheers#
#4
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