#1
i wrote this last night be honest with it.

The love begins to fade
It's obvious, You dont feel the same
As you went i knew something was wrong
but i know that somewhere you love me,
I love you,

And i'm sorry for what i've done
Please say we can get through this one
I need you, I love you, I'd die for you
But you've heard them all before
And i didnt mean to say
A few things they just slipped out
But now our loves fading away.

You can't buy what we had
Can we get back what we had though
You dont feel the same
It's For You I Crave

Now my heart beats for you,
but my heart is broken
please dont turn away
I love you, I love you, I love you

And i'm sorry for what i've done
Please say we can get through this one
I need you, I love you, I'd die for you x2
But you've heard them all before
And i didnt mean to say
A few things they just slipped out

And i'm sorry for what i've done
And i didnt mean to say
It's over.
#2
I like the song over all but i'd have to say that using the idea of "love fading" cheapens your song. Your lyrics seem very personal and i really like how you did this part

And i'm sorry for what i've done
Please say we can get through this one
I need you, I love you, I'd die for you
But you've heard them all before


you used lines that would intitially seems a little cliche but by adding the "you've heard them all before" line it really turns the whole thing on its head. nice work

So i think the only thing really holding this song back from reaching a higher level is the "love fades" thing. I suggest changing the title and challenging yourself to find a different way of saying that. It will only make your song more personal and believe able which will let your listeners and readers connect to it a lot easier.

https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=911164
thats mine if you'd like to crit

good luck!
#3
I don't like it. You get this kind of thing too often these days. It just sounds like generic boy meet's girl, boy loves girl, girl shoots boy in the foot. Sorry.
#5
beautiful stuff man
simply great
yea the title might have an issue ... coz it seems from ur title like u knw ur tired of it, atleast thats the impression i got ... and for me honestly a catchy title attracts alot of attention ... u knw sort of promotion in itself ..
for me the most catchiest title was Fade to black ... i mean sometimes those words need not be in the song but should be to the point and relevant ... u get my drift ?!
other than that honestly i see no flaws ... i can see a big hit already :P