#1
Trembling, tactful voice
Failing to make much noise
Phrases it forms
All so true
Stutters in an eloquent way
Choice so blunt, so bold, so brave
Trailing off, but
Pulling through

Nestling, naive toy
Atop mounds of joy
Beaming like a
Halogen light
Tears meet doom in a smile
Run down grout-curves layed in tile
A glare so real
So bright

Swearing I'll stab you to death in your sleep so I never hear your laugh again
Swearing I'll love you to death every night of my life through thick or through thin
Swearing I'll stab you to death in your sleep so I never hear your laugh again
Swearing I'll love you to death every night of my life through thick or through thin

Lets face it
This mind's diseased
Highly imperfect
Its only
A couple hormones short
Of working
Give me the drugs
Let them take me
Think you'll do better?
Well let's just see
This body rejects
Donors it don't know
Let's go slow

Stubble, one day old
On thighs wrought in gold
Grazing an
Unshaven face
Heaving breasts with drops of sweat
Pushing out of pores that let
Its moist heat soak
Soundly in a bra

Tramp-stamped with a butterfly
By some quaint acquainted guy
Backfat, a Southern
Gourmet food
George-Foreman'd it into bacon
Now those hips are for a-shakin'
A bite sounds nice right now
But that'd be rude

Swearing I'll stab you to death in your sleep so I never hear your laugh again
Swearing I'll love you to death every night of my life through thick or through thin
Swearing I'll stab you to death in your sleep so I never hear your laugh again
Swearing I'll love you to death every night of my life through thick or through thin
#2
Quote by TheTripleThreat
Trembling, tactful voice
Failing to make much noise
Phrases it forms
All so true
Stutters in an eloquent way
Choice so blunt, so bold, so brave
Trailing off, but
Pulling through
I don't even know what is going on in this stanza. There's no punctuation so I don't know where a sentence (or a complete thought) starts or ends.

Nestling, naive toy
Atop mounds of joy
Beaming like a
Halogen light
Tears meet doom in a smile
Run down grout-curves layed in tile
A glare so real
So bright
This isn't bad. If the first two lines were better explained I'd like this better.

Swearing I'll stab you to death in your sleep so I never hear your laugh again
Swearing I'll love you to death every night of my life through thick or through thin
Swearing I'll stab you to death in your sleep so I never hear your laugh again
Swearing I'll love you to death every night of my life through thick or through thin
..wow.

Lets face it
This mind's diseased
Highly imperfect
Its only
A couple hormones short
Of working
Give me the drugs
Let them take me
Think you'll do better?
Well let's just see
This body rejects
Donors it don't know
Let's go slow
This is a nice change from the first half. It's more clear and precise.

Stubble, one day old
On thighs wrought in gold
Grazing an
Unshaven face
Heaving breasts with drops of sweat
Pushing out of pores that let
Its moist heat soak
Soundly in a bra

Tramp-stamped with a butterfly
By some quaint acquainted guy
Backfat, a Southern
Gourmet food
George-Foreman'd it into bacon
Now those hips are for a-shakin'
A bite sounds nice right now
But that'd be rude
Good play on words here.

Swearing I'll stab you to death in your sleep so I never hear your laugh again
Swearing I'll love you to death every night of my life through thick or through thin
Swearing I'll stab you to death in your sleep so I never hear your laugh again
Swearing I'll love you to death every night of my life through thick or through thin


I didn't really like these piece to be honest. I didn't understand it, and the chorus seemed very 'over-the-top'. It is a very dark piece, which is why I was a bit confused/shocked to see the line "Now those hips are for a-shakin'".
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