#1
This is a punk song/poem I'm working on what do you think so far. Any tips?

You preach all your bull**** like you know it all
Propaganda spreading like disease
Your so proud, yeah your standin' tall
Everyone else is only a flea

You judge others and point your finger
You think your better than them
Your a prejudice hypocrite with a programmed mind
Your so wrong that you think your right... all i got gor now
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#2
I don't like it. It doesn't flow at all, it's like you took whatever was on your mind and wrote it down. There's no unity, and even unmelodic death metal needs a little unity.

Of course, I am a Christian, and could be biased. >.<
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#3
Being atheist (or whatever you pronounce it) I can also say that it'S very, but VERY raw, need a little of work poured into it (band meet for it anyone ?) and it could be a really good piece of (hard) work.
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