#1
Yes, your cute and fun
Doesn't mean you can do that
Don't make no ****ing lies
Or treat me the wrong way

Im really not in the mood today
For all your snotty ****
Dont need it right now
So go ruin someone elses day

Im feeling theres really no point
for you to lie about me
Have I done anything to you?
I just wish you were like before

(Chorus)
Make me look like a fool
Do you think that makes you cool?
Cant believe you did something like this
You used to hit my heart but now you miss

I try to be the nicest I can be
Just cant believe that you cant see
Are you that blind to see the truth?
Can you not see the blatent proof?

Im tired of being the one whos hurt
I fall down as you kick me in the dirt
Im sick and tired of your being tricked
I knew that love hurt but didnt know it pricked

Im done with your pretending
Just face it; im done with defending
What am I even doing?; Do you deserve me?
Well, look here baby: Love aint free

Make me look like a fool
Do you think that makes you cool?
Cant believe you did something like this
You used to hit my heart but now you miss

I am such a fool
For falling in love with you
Dont know you anymore
What do you take me for?

I am such a fool
For falling in love with you
Dont know you anymore
What do you take me for?

Make me look like a fool
Do you think that makes you cool?
Cant believe you did something like this
You used to hit my heart but now you miss
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#2
If the swearing is necessary, just type it out. Bleeping it takes away all the force of it I think. There were a lot of simple rhymes going on, but that isn't necessarily a bad thing. You definitely have the 'I'm done with you' thing down, this is very, very easy for a reader to connect with. Try throwing in some more interesting language.
#3
i look at this, and i instantly think, "blues. how 'bout F# major?"
dont ask why that key. i've just never used it, and whenever mess around with it out of boredom, it always sounds interesting.
skaliveson is right, you definitally have the "over you" feeling down, but it also kinda reminds of B.B. King's "Payin' the Cost to Be the Boss". not completly, but its kinda close, sorta.
either way, nice job.
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