#1
This is the first song I've posted and I wanted to see what you guys thought. Tips, constructive criticism anything.

Watching the rain fall down
Outside my window sill
Hearing the thunder clap
Can be such a thrill

Watching the rain fall down
I don’t know what to say
Seeing the lightening flash
And it is followed by the day

Watching the rain fall down
Form puddles on the ground
Falling faster now
Faster than the speed of sound

Chorus:
Falling down
Falling down
Make me clean
Make me clean
Watch it rain
Watch it rain

Watching the rain fall down
In waves upon the street
I just can’t get away
I can’t escape the heat

Watching the rain fall down
As the cars splash in pools
It twinkles in the sun
It twinkles just like jewels

Watching the rain fall down
As it cleanses the world around
That’ll be what it’s truly like
When it falls upon the ground

Chorus
#2
Chorus isn't very good in combination with the Motiff in the verses, it makes it too redundant.
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#4
No, it's not religious. It's about my expieriences just watchign the rain and how beautiful it is.
#5
Oh welp, I would only change this couplet

I just can’t get away
I can’t escape the heat

Maybe soup up the chorus too.

I love the words clap and jewels.


Honestly though I think you must have been really happy and loving life to write this. So what ever that was that made you feel so good should be what the song is about. Whether that is a blow job, a new job, or meeting a new friend. Try to add in some more personification and bring it to life. Get it?