#1
Peril

We are the ones in peril
We send out our last farewell
I didn't seem to catch a word you said
We all lead a double life
We will never give up the fight

Never meant to throw it away
Putting off my future for today
Nothing you can do to make me stay

It all flies off every mile
I admit I'm in denial
A broken heart's the latest style

Just fake a smile...
Just fake a smile...

I've. Learned. To always expect the worse
Why else would I pre-order my herse?
I'm prepared for my demise
I see angiush in your eyes...
I've. Learned. To always hope for the best
With some luck you can forget the rest
Just try and grab that lonely star...
It's in your reach, it's not too far...

Let's re-try, let's restart
Happiness is in my heart
Take me out with a posion dart...

Push always comes to shove
We're not much without love
With some help we can rise above...

Fly like a dove...
Fly like a dove...

I've. Learned. To always expect the worse
Why else would I pre-order my herse?
I'm prepared for my demise
I see angiush in your eyes...
I've. Learned. To always hope for the best
With some luck you can forget the rest
Just try and grab that lonely star...
It's in your reach, it's not too far...

We are the ones in peril
We send out our last farewell
I didn't seem to catch a word you said
We all lead a double life
We will never give up the fight
I really don't care for what you think

I've. Learned. To always expect the worse
Why else would I pre-order my herse?
I'm prepared for my demise
I see angiush in your eyes...
I've. Learned. To always hope for the best
With some luck you can forget the rest
Just try and grab that lonely star...
It's in your reach, it's not too far...


'Tis all. Does it seemed somewhat forced? Comments are appriciated.
Last edited by Found By Fate at Jul 26, 2008,
#2
'Aight, I like it man. It doesn't seem all too forced around the rhyming area, it all seems to flow well, but one suggestion from my point of view would to drop the last line in the first verse, because it seems like you just put it there for poops and giggles, and it doesn't really flow with the whole section.

But other than that, I really like it man.

THUMBS UP!


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#4
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