Poll: Hossenfeifer Green Team? Choose one.
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"If you've nothing...
5 45%
Refraction
1 9%
car crash at a...
4 36%
Mirages
1 9%
Voters: 11.
#1
Top two advance. Single vote. 3 day poll. vote fast. Do not vote for your own. All of the pieces I received were excellent and I am proud and impressed will everyone who is participating.

"If you've nothing nice to say, come sit with me."
I press chalk to the street and draw a door
of make-believe and Dramamine, but
you only pour laughter from your lips and
scrape the knob away.
Heel toe, heel toe.

A mother calls in her child, with
a voice like the earth leashing the sun,
dragging her by the collar to the basement.
The dranpipe mutters something like “Hell
hath no fury--”
You interrupt, nodding, high-browed,
with “No, none at all.”

But all I can think, as I spray my longhand
over the walkway and side, is that
writing is like coming home to find the fish is dead.


Refraction
wishing for the cool of night
my brow heavy, with sun
light
on my feet
but heavy is my heart
one last dance
before we part

time for a smoke
but I don't have a
light
here for a moment
before we take flight


car crash at a demolition yard

dogs at the back of my eyes
scratch through my picket-line smile,
and rats at the back of my mind
eat at the tip of my spine.
they slip so slowly
until they know every inch of me
and have hollowed me out completely.
(Spineless!)
naw, naw, I am merely left conquistador-like
in my approach to life.
now my ballpoint has the weighted feel of a knife
and I’m cutting strips off things already dead.
toppling heads glistening and lifeless.
(And did they bleeeeeeeeeed?)
if they bled, then we’re breathing the blood right now.
the same blood that spills through every open
sewer, and the same blood that swirls out of
every industrial chimney stack.
(The darkest of reds)
naw, why dance around it? It’s black, black, black.


Mirages
he lights a cigarette and in the match's flame
he comes across
the images of those faces in his mind
transitory female beauty
seen only once.
flicks
loved for just a glimpse.
draws
imprinted in the mind
inhaled
But soon to be forgotten
deceased
#2
this round wasn't quite as strong from my POV... however still solid. I've never really gotten into the last one... despite its appearance quite often in the comps. I may have liked it at one point, but the left right thing just doesn't hit for me anymore.

2 is solid. But not on par with 1 and 3.

1 was a bit to random, though some of the imagery was good as were the ideas. I just wish I could have seen how it tied together.

3.
#3
it was a battle between 1 and 3 for me too. i pretty much just agree with the above post, except i voted 1 instead.
#4
Same with others.
Two, I think, is more finished. A solider, overall better, read. Yet it doesn't have the punch of one and three.
One and three... one and three.
Three. It's a bit.
What?
Spineless?!
But it's good.
There's only one thing we can do to thwart the plot of these albino shape-shifting lizard BITCHES!
#5
Three and two were good but one just struck me. Beautiful.
On the eight day we spoke back...

let there be sound.
#6
I thought three was the best of them....
Vivamus mea Lesbia, atque amemus,
rumoresque senum seueriorum
omnes unius aestimemus assis!