#1
Nocturnal


Another night awaken. Another night forsaken. Hell bent on plain deceit.your lies seep through me. Your lost and i have found you. Come sit next to me, don't be scared. Iwon't hurt you I'll only let you be.


Nocturnal for one more night. We're not giving up without a fight. Todays heros turn into tommorows fallen. Nocturnal for one more night. We're not giving up without a fight. Todays heroes turn into tommorows fallen.


Another day wasted. All of them are mistaken. They underestimated me and you. Fight your hardest there's nothing to lose.

Chorus repeats.


A day in the life, no tommorow. Be careful don't mess with me. You come to give me a kiss. I say I know your games don't f@%k with this.


Lead guitar solo!


Rhythm guitar solo!!


Harminized solo!!!


Chorus repeats.
#2
Haha many solos Nice, though, I liked the lyrics... I can see them fitting right in to the right rhythm. You're intro is probably my favorite part, really impacting. I'd like to see other songs you've written.

Nice job

C4C?
#3
Pretty much all three of the songs you posted do nothing to stand out from any average metal track.

By the way.. you aren't allowed to post two in a day, and you can not post more than 2 every 6 days.
Like-father, like-son rebels bloated on korn, eminems and bizkits. Lord hear our prayer take back your Amy Grant mosh-crews and your fair-weather politics
#5
Why is this in prose? The rhythm acts like it's in verse, so it mind as well be verse. And I agree with JustMimes. This song doesn't create a story, nor make the reader feel anything. There's nothing horrible about the lyrics, they're acceptable in metal songs. But if you want to become a GREAT lyricist, my suggestions would be:

-Create a coherent story
-Avoid metal cliches