#1
Please don't ask me what the title means. c4c.

Skee Bop a Doo Wop
We exchanged words,
And features blurred
As we chased skirts
In dirty bar rooms.
Surrounded by singers
That couldn't carry a tune,
But you didn't mind
Cause neither could you.
I asked you about the girl across the room,
"Is she looking at me?
I think she's looking at me.
She's laughing, why's she laughing?
She thinks I'm ugly.
She'll never love me."
You didn't hear me,
You were humming along
To some jukebox song
That I can't remember.
Then you left, with her.
And it hurt.
#2
i love it....
tell me when you record it
i would love to check it out
and i dont have anything for you to crit.
#3
pretty damn guud
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#4
We exchanged words,
And features blurred
As we chased skirts
In dirty bar rooms.

I really like the first two lines, second two are average.
Surrounded by singers
That couldn't carry a tune,
But you didn't mind
Cause neither could you.

I really like this whole section.
I asked you about the girl across the room,
"Is she looking at me?
I think she's looking at me.
She's laughing, why's she laughing?
She thinks I'm ugly.
She'll never love me."
You didn't hear me,
You were humming along
To some jukebox song
That I can't remember.
Then you left, with her.
And it hurt.

Last section really invokes feeling, liked the whole thing. C4C?
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