Moose45
UG Senior Member
Join date: Feb 2007
569 IQ
#1
Well here another attempt at making a song, I'm still not any good at transitions.


Not Finished

EDIT: oh yeah C4C
Attachments:
song4.zip
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Last edited by Moose45 at Jul 27, 2008,
lionslicer9999
Registered User
Join date: Aug 2007
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#2
I liked it all. But bar 16 just doesn't fit there at all.
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Moose45
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Join date: Feb 2007
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#3
^ You want a crit?

and bar 16 is meant to have a scream in there...of some sort.
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lionslicer9999
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Join date: Aug 2007
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#4
Quote by Moose45
^ You want a crit?


I don't care, songs are down there vvv if you want to crit, go ahead it's all welcome.
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henkka_potku
Frank Zappa of metal
Join date: May 2006
1,037 IQ
#5
It's a good song. Too short, make it longer for better crit. The riffs are good, nothing to complain. The rhythm guitar at bars 11-15? well about there the rhythm guitar doesn't fit very well. As I said make it longer for better crit good choice in tuning though, drops are good at metal.

C4C? "Melodeath" in my profile it doesn't have drums, because I am not able to make them.
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Moose45
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Join date: Feb 2007
569 IQ
#6
^ Thanks I just critted your song. You are an amazing guitar player.
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Kardot
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Join date: Jul 2008
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#7
Hmm,those chords complementing the lead line from the beginning of verse 1 don't seem to fit. Other than that,I liked the intro,very groovy. The chorus was okay.

Keep working on it,there's some potencial there.