#1
Alright, I'm pretty young, so I haven't exactly been writing for very long. I'm the singer for my band, so I'm also the lyricist, and I may not be too good (You'll see how cliche my chorus turned out to be), but I'm the only half-decent writer out of the band. I'd really love to improve, so criticism is welcome (As long as it doesn't crush my dreams).


I don't want to disappoint you
So I won't say I'm unique
I don't feel like talking often
But I'll listen if you'll speak

Somebody
Wake me from this dream
All I see is blue
All I see is blue
Somebody
Wake me from this dream
All I want is you
All I want is you

I know something I can't tell you
But it just needs to be said
And it's harder to listen
With these voices in my head

The more I see the less I say
And despite all of my hate
I'm still just another copy
Of something that was once great

Somebody
Wake me from this dream
All I see is blue
All I see is blue
Somebody
Wake me from this dream
All I want is you
All I want is you

Somebody
Wake me from this dream
All I see is blue
All I see is blue
Somebody
Wake me from this dream
All I want is you
All I want is you
#2
instead of criticism, how about critiques that identify posative and negative things. Also, maybe give us an idea for what sound your band has? Rock, Metal, Screamo, Punk, Ska?
It is late and I need to go to sleep, I have work in like 6 hours, but I will come back.
#3
Critiques that identify positive and negative things would be nice (I do want to hear some positive things to keep my self esteem up).
Kind of hard to come up with a description, but we're kind of alternative rock with some metal overtones. The best term I can think of is gothic grunge.