everything i write down sounds like **** and doesnt make sense...
when i write somthing down it seems okay in my brain but then it goes on the paper looking like a two year old wrote it...

i look at everyone elses writings and its 1000% better than mine, i dont understand it

so, how do you get things to sound right and fit together?
First thing's first, go over the rules real quick. You're not allowed to post that here. Don't bother reposting this in Tecniques, because it's too vague, too hard to answer and gets asked all the time. Bring us a piece, then we'll talk.