Work in progress it's ska punk. What do you think so far.

WORLD WAR II(tentative title)
Memories of home running through my head
As I read the letters my family sent
There words give me encouragement as I'm stuck here in hell
The only thing that makes me feel alright
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Not much too analyze or critique.
Quote by ottoavist

i suppose there's a chance
i'm just a litte too shallow to consider
that maybe i've been a little more eager
each day to wake up and take a shower
brush my teeth and smile for the mirror
If you're trying to get an emotional feel rather than like the horror of war then i reckon you could nail it. Should sound good man keep it up (Y)
Not bad so far...drop the title though. It's too obvious it's about war, go for something more subtle that portrays the emotion of battle or sums up the mood of the song. If it is specifically set during WWII, then make sure the details in the song tell the audience that. Keep it up!
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