Poll: Final voting. which one do you choose?
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View poll results: Final voting. which one do you choose?
Jennifer.
0 0%
Untitled
4 36%
"If you've nothing...
3 27%
car crash at...
4 36%
Voters: 11.
#1
3, 2, 1. Finals. Do not vote for your own. Good Luck to all. 3 day vote.


Jennifer.
dripping pistol
pretty crystals on the window
falling missiles whine outside,
whispered whistles,
paws landing soft on the snow.
her lips quiver
between her head
and wherever they were taking her
over a bleached white ground,
specks of red sprinkled around.
police man whispers
grace for the love of God
while the hounds
blow fog onto her bones,
still warm and gently breathing stones.
a silent sound
like a match onto the ice
holds her safe under it’s paws.


Untitled
I sat in your room and made
paper aeroplanes,
scrawling symbols on the sides
while sustaining sighs,
prettying your philistine paintings
by taming paper wings,
kept safe under your gaze;
a dark hazel astral game

Our moment of impact led
to broken pacts;
in our logical romance trap
binded by integral fact
that it doesn’t work like that,
and these two particles
can’t react.


"If you've nothing nice to say, come sit with me."

I press chalk to the street and draw a door
of make-believe and Dramamine, but
you only pour laughter from your lips and
scrape the knob away.
Heel toe, heel toe.

A mother calls in her child, with
a voice like the earth leashing the sun,
dragging her by the collar to the basement.
The dranpipe mutters something like “Hell
hath no fury--”
You interrupt, nodding, high-browed,
with “No, none at all.”

But all I can think, as I spray my longhand
over the walkway and side, is that
writing is like coming home to find the fish is dead.


car crash at a demolition yard

dogs at the back of my eyes
scratch through my picket-line smile,
and rats at the back of my mind
eat at the tip of my spine.
they slip so slowly
until they know every inch of me
and have hollowed me out completely.
(Spineless!)
naw, naw, I am merely left conquistador-like
in my approach to life.
now my ballpoint has the weighted feel of a knife
and I’m cutting strips off things already dead.
toppling heads glistening and lifeless.
(And did they bleeeeeeeeeed?)
if they bled, then we’re breathing the blood right now.
the same blood that spills through every open
sewer, and the same blood that swirls out of
every industrial chimney stack.
(The darkest of reds)
naw, why dance around it? It’s black, black, black.
#2
I never win jack **** on this ****ing forum.





Not sure what I'll vote yet, though there's one that sticks out quite a bit.
#4
-perks head-
eh?
i should take a screenshot while i'm like tieing.
this won't last long.
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#7
I would choose either the first or second. I hate the "witty particle couplet" (as that is what I've dubbed it) at the end of Untitled and the first is mine so I am required to hate it. But yeah, if I didn't have one up there my vote would be for one of the first two.
#8
Quote by #1 synth
perfect, now someone break this tie and no one else vote so I don't have to make a tie-breaker.


I like how you think
My brain hurts. This is ending at 12somethingorother in the morning of Saturday, yes?
There's only one thing we can do to thwart the plot of these albino shape-shifting lizard BITCHES!
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#13
LOL so he really did get banned.
nicee. for how long?
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#15
Without a tie and a ban I could've known who'd won
There's only one thing we can do to thwart the plot of these albino shape-shifting lizard BITCHES!
#16
I think we should just declare ""If you've nothing nice to say, come sit with me."" the winner.

It's only fair, what with the tie and all.


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I have trouble keeping track.
#18
very funny. put up the shoot-out, lazarus

... or have your ghost do it. w/e
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