#1
funny little one for one of my old gf's. she was the "nurse" haha. anyways, C4C and let me know what ya think, and besides, "it's cliche". There's not much that is wow and brand new nowadays so just find something constructive to say please. thank you!

Nurse, my lovely lady
I thought that you could save me.
With a soft inhale of steady breath
Passed between our waiting lips.

chorus:
I thought that you could save me
Darling I crave you baby
I crave a Woman Like You!

You ride across my dreamy fields
Flowers riddled in your curls
I dream of such a lovely world
When I dream of a woman like you

You're a goddess in my eye
I think of you all the time
I want you to be mine
I want you to be mine!

chorus:
I thought that you could save
Darling I need you baby
I need a Woman Like You!

bridge:
You yearn to be pleased
Unknowing wanting to know what it means
What it is to be
Made a woman! By me!

I thought that you would save me
Darling I loved you baby
I loved a Woman Like You
#2
People really need to attach chords to these lyrics at least. Notations would be better!!

But trying to use my super duper imaginationatory (I'm lame, deal with it). I'll put it together with my imaginary chord structure, and yeah. Some pretty good lyrics.
#3
Quote by MilichichiBass

Nurse, my lovely lady
I thought that you could save me.
With a soft inhale of steady breath
Passed between our waiting lips.(good so far, nice intro)

chorus:
I thought that you could save me
Darling I crave you baby
I crave a Woman Like You!(why is that all caps?)(generic chorus/very 80's)

You ride across my dreamy fields
Flowers riddled in your curls
I dream of such a lovely world
When I dream of a woman like you(still good)

You're a goddess in my eye
I think of you all the time
I want you to be mine
I want you to be mine!(what genre is this? I get a born in the usa vibe)

chorus:
I thought that you could save
Darling I need you baby
I need a Woman Like You!

bridge:
You yearn to be pleased
Unknowing wanting to know what it means
What it is to be
Made a woman! By me!

I thought that you would save me
Darling I loved you baby
I loved a Woman Like You


It's very americana to me. Good solid song, not my kinda song, but a good song. I can picture quite the audience for this song. Good use of words nothing is reoccurring /overused/cliche. You did justice to this theme.

Crit mold in sig plz.