that was boring and didnt really sound like metal
Quote by postmortem2006

Give him something he can appreciate.

Herpes maybe.
you really helped him out there

it's got kind of a cool eerie sound going on. however, the main riff thing really needs some sort of variation. I'm sure even with vocals, it will get somewhat old for the listener. and that same little idea is continued throughout the entire song. The chorus felt like it needed a bit more oomph. It seemed to me like the perfect spot to bring in some distortion and let it all go wild. Drums could use a bit of variation also. I like what the bass is doing though. It's simple, yet perfect for the piece.

I'd say this as of now looks like just an idea, and an idea that needs to be developed. Continue it and keep putting effort into this one and I think you'll come out with something pretty sweet.
...Nothing you've ever...
...Planned on ever turned out...
...The way you planned...

...You're still disappointing them...
Quote by Its_Rock77
you really helped him out there

well it was either that or comment on how boring it was and how it was pretty much a single riff throughout the whole song