#1
Love Expressed (By A Touch)


(Verse 1)
A song is not a song until you sing it
A bell is not a bell until you ring it
Love wasn't put in your heart to stay
Love isn't love until you give it away
I could go on for days about how I feel
But her expressing love has made it real

(Chorus)
She said she loves me with all of her heart
And if I left she would fall apart
I never realized that she cared so much
Until that night I felt her touch

(Verse 2)
She cried on my shoulders said, "Baby don't go".
From there I saw the love start to show
She said, "Baby I'm sorry for being upset sometimes".
"For being emotional and hard at times".
I could go on for days about how I feel
But her expressing love has made it real

(repeat chorus)

(chorus 2)
You said you love me with all of your heart
And if I left you would fall apart
I never realized that you cared so much
Until the night I felt your touch

(outro)
And love was expressed...
Love was expressed by your touch
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Last edited by popeye100 at Jul 31, 2008,
#2
Lyrics are awesome man! Pretty conventional, but conventional is a tried and tested method, and it works. Sounds like you put a lot of time into the words, it's practical but still shows feeling without being confusing.

As for things that could use some work, I think the first two lines of the first verse need to be changed. Though they make sense, they sound like your are merely stating the obvious, for the sake of something that rhymes. I like how you're saying something isn't acknowledged till it's used, but those lines, especially the second just don't seem to fit

The second verse is gold. I love how you've incorporated narration and dialogue into the song and it really works. Chorus is also great, I'm getting a really good vibe from this so far.

My only question to you is, what genre and feel is this song? I'm guessing it would be a ballad, but it would also work very well as a light rock song.

Nice job again, mate.
#3
mm one sec bump i gotta work out then i'll look at this
It's not stalking to watch her sleep if she fell asleep watching a movie.
a silly wind
(\__/)
(='.'=) LoNg LivE tHe BunNy!
(")_(")
#4
Thanx man... I'll look into the first two lines... I just play the acoustic guitar to this song... I've been wanting to turn this into a soft power-ballad but i havent been able to put much time into it... give me some time though... Thanx again mate
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#5
(Verse 1)
A song is not a song until you sing it
A bell is not a bell until you ring itnot a huge fan. kinda like sayin if a tree falls when no one is there does it make a sound? not only that but u cant rhyme it with it lol
Love wasn't put in your heart to stay
Love isn't love until you give it awaymeh i like it it's ok. cut idea
I could go on for days about how I feel
But her expressing love has made it realmm i have mixed feelings on these last 2

i thought hte first part sounded very... repetitive. kind of annoying when i read it.

(Chorus)
She said she loves me with all of her heart
And if I left she would fall apart
I never realized that she cared so much
Until that night I felt her touch

sounds good. i have no qualms

(Verse 2)
She cried on my shoulders said, "Baby don't go".
From there I saw the love start to show
She said, "Baby I'm sorry for being upset sometimes".
"For being emotional and hard at times".
I could go on for days about how I feel
But her expressing love has made it real

get ride of sometimes on the 3rd line sounds bad when you use times again and the extra syllabals make that line seem out of place

(repeat chorus)

(outro)
And love was expressed...
Love was expressed by your touch
mmm i htink this is.. a WEAK outro.. imo... iono what to really replace this but all i have to say is that it's weak as it is now.

over all it was ok. i think the most solid verse tho was the 2nd. oh yea lamost forgot c4c? in sig
It's not stalking to watch her sleep if she fell asleep watching a movie.
a silly wind
(\__/)
(='.'=) LoNg LivE tHe BunNy!
(")_(")
#6
Thanx for being honest
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my last fail was breaking up with my gf.

that's going to suck for a while


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Well, not really haha!