#1
i recently broken up with my gf..so i decided to make a song about how i feel its not finshed yet, i wud like constructive comments and anything i can improve on thanks.


[chrous]
ill hold on to our moments. 6
i wont let go hope you know. 7
im so alone, please dont go 7
i threw it all away 6
i want you to know 5
the times we had 4
were the best 3

[verse 1]
its hard to know ill
always be alone
you may change
i just wonder
how long it will take
i just hope you figure out
no one will love you as much
as i love you.

[chrous]
ill hold on to our moments. 6
i wont let go hope you know. 7
im so alone, please dont go 7
i threw it all away 6
i want you to know 5
the times we had 4
were the best 3

[Verse 2]
#2
its got a good plan,
but you need more of a variety of words...
change some stuff up for alone...
verse 2 show go more indept on how your feeling.
because what you have written so far is that your alone and how you had good times.
but it has potential.
chicks like love songs.