#1
I believe that happiness is just a dream
Not here or there but somewhere very in between
Like waves roaming free in a shifting sea
Until they crash upon the shore

And love itself is just a fleeting feeling
Just a bad movie with some desperate acting
Giving us a meaning we all are needing
To the the life we want to ignore

But I have found that blindness is so rewarding
To always understand without ever knowing
To not know where you are headed but keep on going
And disregard the lies

And those that are looking will keep on looking
A lifetime of endlessly dark surroundings
And when they are told what they are finding
It's really no big suprise

If this is all false then please strike me down
Bomb all my shelters and my fallouts
I know what I have and what I am without
I dont think I need you now

I remember a time of cleaner rain
A brighter sunrise and a clearer day
A longer song with an endless refrain
But its all past me now

Once I have said all I have to say
I will die and life will blow away
Everything really just stays the same
Just with a different sound
#3
I believe that happiness is just a dream
Not here or there but somewhere very in between
Like waves roaming free in a shifting sea
Until they crash upon the shore
pretty solid. the opening really didint hook me though. i felt that it was lacking. but solid stanza. i think that you could do with out very in the second line . addes un needed syllables

And love itself is just a fleeting feeling
Just a bad movie with some desperate acting
Giving us a meaning we all are needing
To the the life we want to ignore
i love the first 2 lines. the metaphor is nice as well. the last 2 lines i thought were weak..nto that they are bad lines. they hold meaning but it jsut doenst seem to sit with me though.

But I have found that blindness is so rewarding
To always understand without ever knowing
To not know where you are headed but keep on going
And disregard the lies
solid. last line though i think u can do without, it kind of takes us off

And those that are looking will keep on looking
A lifetime of endlessly dark surroundings
And when they are told what they are finding
It's really no big surprise
werd. i guess it's simple. functional

If this is all false then please strike me down
Bomb all my shelters and my fallouts
I know what I have and what I am without
I dont think I need you now
intresting. seems like a complete shift. mmm... i see the first line, didint like the bombing shelters and ect. when i think bomb iono just doesn't do it. try to think sumthing subtle. yet so, powerful somethign that causes death, but not so gaudy as a "bomb" but the total mood shift. i can definitely connect the above stanza's to this but it is a stretch. maybe introduce "you" before.

I remember a time of cleaner rain
A brighter sunrise and a clearer day
A longer song with an endless refrain
But its all past me now
meh indiffrent i thought u could do with or without it

Once I have said all I have to say
I will die and life will blow away
Everything really just stays the same
Just with a different sound
mm indiffrent again

you have solid idea's and i can see where your trying to go with this.mmm... first few stanza's worked well but l8r you started to jump into that kind of i'm talkin about you and i dont want you any more thing. i think you can tie these idea's up very well. i think you set a great base with teh opening stanzas you jsut have to connect them all now. mmm other then taht it was pretty good, well written. C4C? in sig
It's not stalking to watch her sleep if she fell asleep watching a movie.
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