#1
k this doesn't have a title yet but it's my favorite one that i've written. thx for listening.

We’re so far apart
Inside, breaks my heart
And we never wanted to be alone.
The time we spent together
Couldn’t last forever
And now you just want to come home.

Hard times will come, hard times will go
But now you stand in the rain
I wish I could be there to hand you a coat
But I live far away.

Chorus:
I’ll always hold my hand out to you
No matter the distance between
I’ll always be there to show that I care
I promise to never be mean.
I’ll be your best friend ‘till death do we part
It’s been like this since the start
I can’t imagine how you feel
But my love will always be real

There isn’t a day that goes by
Where I don’t think and start to cry
I wish I could be there to hold your hand
And tell you that you can stand.
One foot in front of the other, baby
There you go, one more time.
Hard times will come and hard times will go
Remember, you’re never alone.

Chorus

I miss you
And I promise you that we’ll re-unite
Then we can cry in each other’s arms
But for now, you’re all that’s on my mind
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#2
I think it's really nice ^^.
I can't really give a proffesional critique, but I like the way it's written ... (and the topic)

Byee.
#3
Quote by JennJenn
k this doesn't have a title yet but it's my favorite one that i've written. thx for listening.

We’re so far apart
Inside, breaks my heart
And we never wanted to be alone.
The time we spent together
Couldn’t last forever
And now you just want to come home.
Although it doesn't have anything new, it is well layed out and enjoyable to read.

Hard times will come, hard times will go
But now you stand in the rain
I wish I could be there to hand you a coat
But I live far away.
The first two lines didn't have any hidden qualities, when the topic is so sweet and tender, it should have that secret motive of care and compassion. Its weak in other words. The next two lines are quite compassionate though, although the last line has a overly simple method about it, it could of been better.

Chorus:
I’ll always hold my hand out to you
No matter the distance between
I’ll always be there to show that I care
I promise to never be mean.
Try and avoid the word "mean" as best as you can, unless you are trying to be humorous.
I’ll be your best friend ‘till death do we part
It’s been like this since the start
I can’t imagine how you feel
But my love will always be real

There isn’t a day that goes by
Where I don’t think and start to cry
Is this true?
I wish I could be there to hold your hand
And tell you that you can stand.
One foot in front of the other, baby
There you go, one more time.
Hard times will come and hard times will go
Remember, you’re never alone.

Chorus

I miss you
And I promise you that we’ll re-unite
Then we can cry in each other’s arms
Overly soppey' for my tastes.
But for now, you’re all that’s on my mind



Apart from a few typical cliches of, helping your friend and being a shoulder to cry on, you miss each other and want to be in each other's company once again, it's a decent read.
It's layout, tenderness and compassion is clear and there is a nice amount of emotion.
Keep it up.

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