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Ok so i wrote some lyrics, then sent them to a freind who im in a band with and he sent them back with his version, and i would like opinions on whose is better. thanks


Hordes of the Black Abyss


Brandons version


i have hordes at my command,
when the bitter wind blows not one shall stand
divine dark forest hide secrets unkempt,
a lone wolf howls as blood runs into gnarled roots
decadence begins as the blade is drawn
your infernal breed has brought destruction
and sought for the end of our kind
my legions ov beast cannot compare
to demons who bring dark and despair
one by one the leaders are slain
giving rise to a new world where tyrants are'nt king
as the victorious ride a black flame burns
a black as dark as the hearts of those whom hath betrayed


Hordes of the Black Abyss


Skylers version


I have hordes at my command
When the bitter winds of black storms blow
Not one shall stand before me
Divine dark forests hide secrets
Frozen by icewinds from the north
As blood runs into gnarled roots
Decadence begins as the blades are drawn
Thy infernal breed has brought destruction and plauge
And sought for the end of your kind
Thy legions ov beasts
Compare to demons that bring dark and despair
Blizzards of winter storms
Norse hordes ride across the land
One by one your leaders are slain
Giving rise to thy old world
Where tyrants of my kindom rule the landscape
As the victorious ride across the bodys lost souls
A black flame burns in the eyes of the conquering Norseman